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foolish_m0rtalMuse chapter three out! YES. I've had this written out for some time and now it's finally gone! Don't let the door hit you on your way out!
Gabriel: Door?
Kuro: yeah...I need to put that on the shopping list. And Pocky.
Gabriel: Pocky?
Kuro: O_O YOU HAVE NOT LIVED!!!
http://www.fanfiction.net/secure/live_preview.php?storyid=3143141&chapter=3/
Gabriel: Door?
Kuro: yeah...I need to put that on the shopping list. And Pocky.
Gabriel: Pocky?
Kuro: O_O YOU HAVE NOT LIVED!!!
http://www.fanfiction.net/secure/live_preview.php?storyid=3143141&chapter=3/
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Date: 2007-02-20 08:07 pm (UTC)Pride's up. Forgive the wait please:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3404801/1/
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Date: 2007-02-20 08:53 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2007-02-20 11:33 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2007-02-23 09:14 pm (UTC)Amou: WHAT?!
Er, I mean, the colouring is pretty, heheh..sorry there, Amou.
Amou: *mutter* I am NOT pretty.
FM: The fangirls argue otherwise, my dear.
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Date: 2007-02-26 12:19 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2007-02-27 02:25 am (UTC)It's pretty sad that all the guys in Eva have better figures than I do...
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Date: 2007-02-27 05:39 pm (UTC)Lafayel is skinnier than me, though, and he has MUCH better stomach musculature. (I'm all flab. *sticks out tongue at him*)
I am not familiar with Neo Genesis Evangelion except by manga ads. Note to self--I need to become addicted and see if stoptazmo has it for download just so i can check and agree. (As a matter of interest though, I used this for my JO fanfiction. Araiel looks decidedly feminine, and has a great figure! Even as a man-shaped angel thing!...oooh....weird...O_O;;)
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Date: 2007-02-27 08:18 pm (UTC)I think Lafayel is skinnier than EVERYBODY. And he has a better stomach than anyone non-anime.
Hey, guess WHAT? We had this stupid creativity-stifling ridiculous thing called the Young Authors contest and the prompt was "if you could wish for anything, what would you wish for?"
Mine was like "I'd like to meet NF-sama before she goes off to college!"
and the person reading my paper was like "...who's NF-sama?"
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Date: 2007-02-27 08:34 pm (UTC)Argh, another B? Crap. (SO NOT FAIR!) I'd swap with you. I'm probably going to turn into a sagging cavewoman at this rate! *mopes*
Heeheehee...you sound like Nakaura-san. *laughs* Now I'm even more envious. How'd you like to swap and magically become pan-european? I have cannibals back in my family lines on teh Dutch side! ^_^
Yes, actually I'm partially serious, because I have Freese blood, and they carried a tradition of eating prisoners of war when they were victorious in battle. (I like rare meat. Makes you wonder, doesn't it? *snickers*)
Yes...Lafayel is inhumanly skinny. But then again, manga characters seem to view it as a matter of course to have hands wider than thier waists. I wouldn't ahve a problem with Lafayel's proportions except it makes me wonder how he works the wings if he has basically no space for musculature.
The weights given for the characters are insane given their musculature. I gained five pounds sinply because I took up biking--and I got skinnier when I did that. Muscle weighs alot. There is NO WAY Shiba weighs that little with how he looks, and Nakaura...jeez. No way. Not with his height--I don't care HOW slender he is.
Don't even get me started on Mana. She should be heavier if only because of her size out in front. *shakes head irritably*
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Date: 2007-02-28 12:26 am (UTC)*snort* One time, I was standing outside (wearing the formal choir uniform) waiting for my ride after my choir concert. I had the pins out of my hair so pieces of my hair were in my face and I had my glasses on. One of the mothers ran up and was like "You look so COOL," and ran away.
I was like o_O N-Nur....
Personally, you sound quite pretty. You DON"T want the black hair and eyes. Everyone always mistakes you for some other Asian, even though you look NOTHING the same.
My ancestors were fish-eaters. And I like fish. That's not genetics, that's mother's cookbook.
One day, someone's going to stick a pin into one of the JO characters and they're going to deflate...
I took up nerd school. It doesn't let you eat or sleep. I've lost eight pounds. Now I'm like...120 lb.
My mother is like *squee* You got skinnier!
And I'm just thinking *glare* It came at a terrible price...
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Date: 2007-02-28 05:52 pm (UTC)I am NOT pretty. I have lots of acne and crooked teeth and a tendency to dress in goodwill clothes. I look very strange because you'd think something would work to my advantage, but everything else about me is just "bleeeaaaah, I think I'll just roll out of bed and put on some clothes and hope my breath doesn't smell too bad"
dyed blonds: What color did you use for your hair?
Skunky: *vein throbs in forehead*
dyed blonds not yet scared away: Can i straighten it?
Skunky: DIE!
dyed blonds: EEEK!
This icon is VERY much what I look like except for the complexion choice. Add red splotches.
I know, that does sound rather annoying. Half the people in my grade are convinced everyone's chinese. There are only a few asians around here, and they're mostly koreans who laugh at the word "sour" because they think it sounds funny. (They're very nice people though ^_^;;)
I like fish too, but Americans generally aren't big fish eaters. My love of fish is mostly my location.
Only Mana deflates. Everyone else removes their rubber suits.
I'm 130 last I checked, and my weight went up from the biking because my genetics gave me elongated hams with less salt for legs.
You LIKED nerd school last I heard...
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Date: 2007-03-01 02:04 am (UTC)Caius: Y-you sound like me...
FM:...go to sleep.
Cai: Okay. *conks out*
I'd rather be heavy from muscle than from wasting away on instant kimchi ramen and physics homework. I always think, damn, when aliens finally conquer the earth, I won't have much muscle to run away with the rest of the screaming crowd. Seriously, I think about these things.
I used to be in basketball but, again, nerd school rulez and so I had to drop that, along with Symphonic band and whatnot.
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Date: 2007-03-01 05:43 pm (UTC)speaking of which I ran through ONE of your beta thigns last night. I'll probably send it later. (so you can marvel at the abundance of 8pt red arial as I make comments on everything.)
Basketball? *mental image of 'Ja-san changes to a crossbreed between Isshin and Tomonori, with boobs* @_@
What instrument for band? (I gave mine up in about seventh grade--I'm mostly just stuck in the art department now as I try to explain that I want to go into education, not graphic design to anyone who won't listen. *sigh*)
They HAVE instant kimchee ramen? Woah. You learn something new every day... I basically just live off creamcheese "everything" bagels, soup I make myself (which is really tasty and pretty decent for you, too), and milk...lots of milk. @_@ raw spinach and cheese crackers probably come into the equation somewhere too...
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Date: 2007-03-03 02:26 am (UTC)Thanks very much for beta-ing! I made comments and I'll mail it back when I can.
*cackle* Yeah, that's me. I'm not as tall as Tomonori or Shiba, but basically...and I'm brown. Not like DARRK South Indian brown, but brown none the less.
I play flute. I also helped out percussion last year. I was going to play oboe this year, but, again, I had to drop out. Grr.
CHECK IN WAL-MART. Kimchi ramen is there!! It's so <3!
...you know, I have about the same diet as you (+ tea.) C-could I move in next door to you or something?
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Date: 2007-03-05 05:45 pm (UTC)You're welcome--i found the email, and replied some more. (Oh God.) It's in green now, and I'll probably send it after school if I remember--I had three hours of sleep sometime this morning due to latin, and I'm uncaffeinated so I don't know how good my mind's going to be...
If you're brown someone donw here would probably just ask if you're cuban. Me, I'm the color of paste. I told you, I don't leave my house. I'm either white (really white) or I'm splotchy pink. I'd take being a nice brown over that... (I take it back, you sound like Ragshiel--I WAS right...quwahahaaa!)
What's walmart? *snicker* (I STILL don't leave my house, and I bike too and from school--hint hint, I don't drive.)
Tea's in my diet too. Unsweetened and steeped to the point of killing braincells. (ie. Black as night, bitter as penance, and chai if you have it.) Seriously, with how often peopel seem to be running after the housing market down here, chances are, if you have about 400,000$, you could move next to my dingy house and share in my dietary weirdness. ^_^ (Yay! Another sibling!)
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Date: 2007-02-27 08:44 pm (UTC)*grin*...awww...*warm fuzzies* I never leave my house...so..um...actually chances are much better that during/after college I could find some way to attack people I know with my...uh...illustrious presence or something. (*looks around* What?)
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Date: 2007-02-28 12:27 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2007-03-05 05:45 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2007-03-15 06:58 pm (UTC)and I was like O_O ARE YOU SERIOUS?!
I really hope they are. that would be SO COOL! PsychoKitty and I were talking through email the whole time I was in Chicago and since her town is right by, I asked my dad if we could stop there on the way back (PK said she wouldn't mind)
So my dad says, okay, sure and I was so EXCITED.
Then he says, here's the exit; you want me to turn here?
and I said, yeah, sure. I was PK's town on the sign and everything.
We passed the exit and I thought my dad had found an alternate route.
Couple of minutes later, my mother was like "haha, it was so great how your father asked you to turn at the exit and you said "yeah" back so sarcastically, like you were actually thinking of going there. Hahaha. Wow, so FUNNY."
I was crushed.
Apparently, my parents had thought I was joking.
I had to apologise to PK and everything. *faint*
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Date: 2007-03-15 07:14 pm (UTC)That would be AWESOME! ...Of course there is that whole business where I never elave my house and...the possibility of explaining to both our parents exactly how two such strange people managed to meet--then the issue where my parents might actually check into that whole "fanfiction.net" thing...
...any suggestions? It would be cool... *sigh*
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Date: 2007-03-15 08:01 pm (UTC)a) not let me meet you
b) try to find out what all this fanfiction business is, and that would be BAD!!
Anyway, I dunno. You could be...a FRIEND of someone I met at summer camp. That's kind of plausible, since someone I know from summer camp lives in Florida...
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Date: 2007-03-16 11:16 am (UTC)Also I know very little about said summer camp, so they'd best not question me too closely...
But other than all that...we might have a bit of a plan there...now I need to find some plan to get my non-driving self out of the house, and the question comes up--where would we meet? Miami's kinda sprawled out...
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Date: 2007-03-16 01:16 pm (UTC)I asked them why we were going somewhere on Spring Break and they told me "to get you out of the house."
"But I have exams the week after."
"We...we can just go for a weekend."
"Okay. What fun place are we going again? Miami, you said, right?"
"No. Now we're going for college visits."
And I'm pretty sure the expression on my face was something like :O
"Wh-what?"
"College visits. You know, we were thinking Princeton."
"B-but...b-but...damn, that's another fanfiction.net person I'll have to apologise to!"
"What are you talking about?"
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Date: 2007-03-19 11:34 am (UTC)You get back your SAT scores yet?
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Date: 2007-03-20 11:43 pm (UTC)*sigh* Uber-colleges; are they overrated? I have no idea. People define themselves too much by uber-colleges. I think it should be the other way around. So impersonal...
aaand I'm talking like Poet Gabriel again. Hippie...
You're not dumping yourself at FIU. You are...ARRIVING! *fanfare*
And no dear, I haven't received my SAT scores yet.
Did you know that 'gotten' used to be an un-word? A slang word? A non-dictionary word?
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Date: 2007-03-21 11:38 am (UTC)As for talking like Poet-Gabriel, I have some Auden poems I typed up becaus they seemed like somethign you sould use... I can send them to you later if you'd like (assuming you aren't in the suffering throes of my other mass email I sent you yesterday.)
Also, on my Lafayel front of "serpant marking" one of my other friends had this up in her blog.
http://blog.wfmu.org/freeform/2007/03/missionary_enco.html
I shoudl be grossed out and yet I can't stop cracking up and thinking "that man needs to start biting his nails..."
Well...you'll get your scores and I'll take my mock-AP english test this saturday...and we'll both somehow live through it.
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Date: 2007-03-21 07:24 pm (UTC)I just feel like whatever grades I get or whatever test scores I get, it's never going to be enough and there's some sort of elaborate secret handshake I'm supposed to have been trained in from birth to be able to get into these uber-colleges. I feel like I'm supposed to be doing SOMETHING and I have no clue what it is. It's very frustrating.
Colleges all talk about 'letting the students get to know about college life' but you know what? Colleges do squat! You ask about the admissions process: "Oh, it's different for every college." and "Just do the best you can." and "We look at all sorts of different things."
That's crap! They're just being dodgy little sneaks. You know what I think they do? Each professor represents an applicant and the entire admissions office has...has, like a Dark Tournament and they just battle it out!
Of course, everyone's heard of that college that just puts all the resumes on a table and puts a fan on high and the papers that stay on the table are the ones that get selected. Admission, oy...
Ah, if you please, would you send me Auden? I'm in the midst of reading Leaves of Grass and I've written some independent poetry of my own so I can try to pass it off as Gabriel's. Such a poser am I...
That blog! That's horrible!!! Eeeyeck! And when he was describing how he removed them! Augh!!
Good luck on your AP english! I'll send Caius along for good luck.
Caius: But I don't wan-
FM: *glare* GO.
Caius: O-okay...
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Date: 2007-03-21 07:27 pm (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2007-03-22 11:36 am (UTC)I'll send you the Auden...there was one in particular I thought you might be able to use, but then agian, that's speculation on top of fanfiction, so...yeah...might nto be that useful, but I WILL SEND it. (Coincidence! I had to write poetry for my creative writing class. You can see the rough draft of my anapest tetrameter assignment on my last blog entry if you'd like...)
*grin* I know--delightful isn't it? I don't think they have that kind of surgery for Lafayel, though they did do a good deal of work to keep his internal organs from developing that sort of stuff...and uh...Michael resurected him at least once during the whole bit... poor guy. He's got the most angst, seriously...
Skunky: ...
Skunky: Hi, Cadmus-sama.
Caius: T_T Hi.
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Date: 2007-03-23 12:27 am (UTC)So, I don't know very much about poetry. I read oodles of it, but I've never tried my hand at the styles. A lot of mine is free verse. (walt whitman & ginsburg strike!)
I've done some stuff with rhyme patterns, but that's it. I may try out some Petrarchan sonnets, (and fail miserably) who knows?
While I'm thinking about it, I have a question.
Su, you know that whole thing about Gabriel being all like "Bwahaha, love poetry? Terrence, this is stupid stuff! (you eat your victuals fast enough. Sorry, sorry! A.E. Houseman moment!!)."
and then you KNOW he's going to write some in the future!!
Well, what I have so far is that he's been working on that poetry separately. When he's sending in his other manuscripts to the publishers, the love poetry manuscript gets mixed in with the others and he ends up sending it in by accident.
Now, should I have him arrive in time to snatch the manuscript from the pile or should he arrive too late and find out that it's going to be published and there's nothing he can do about it?
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Date: 2007-03-23 11:35 am (UTC)Well as for you plot point, that depends. Is he going to keep sending in love poetry by accident? (or possibly start to run out of non-love poetry?)Because then you could have him snatch it back, but later turn in some out of desperation (still constantly worying about what Kuro will say when he buys the book and runs up to him like:)
Kuro: you wrote this?"
*Gabriel blushes and looks away*
Kuro: But it's good! *flipping through*
Gabriel: You can stop. I know you don't like it.
Kuro: No really! I like it! So...who's the inspiration?
Gabriel: *swallows hard* I...can't expose my muse so easily. *smiles nervously* It would be rather difficult for you to meet them, nonetheless.
Kuro: *grin* I see. She's shy then?
Gabriel: I wouldn't say that...it would jsut be...difficult...
Kuro: *imagining female poet-hippieness and otherwise going into fangirl romantic fluff fantasising in his mind and sihing at the cuteness of it all* So...what's it like?--love?
Gabriel: ...
conversation could go on from there. Eventually it could mount up to heavy-handed hints, and eventual tension-snap fangirl-beloved shounan-ai goodness. Or, you could speed up the plot and have gabriel not even realize his poetry's out there until he gets a copy of the book and goes beet red with mortification.
Kuro: What? Lemme see!
Gabriel: *snaps book shut* There's been a terrible mistake!
Kuro: What? Where? Lemme see!
Gabriel: No!
*Kuro and Gabriel squabble in a most undignified manner for the book*
Kuro: *resorts to tickling* (Well maybe not really)
Gabriel: *silently mortified as Kuro thumbs through the book--stuck watching helplessly*
Kuro: *eyes widen* "To darkness, which brought me light?"
Gabriel: *blushes furiously* Give me that!
Kuro: *holds it out of his reach* *smiles evilly* I thought you said you didn't write love poetry.
Gabriel: *hisses* It's a MISTAKE.
Kuro: *still reading and trying to avoid Gabriel's flailing for his book* This actually isn't half bad...
My fangirl mind is already twitching in anticipation. ^_^ (Can I beta? *jumps up and down eagerly*)
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Date: 2007-03-23 07:25 pm (UTC)(Yeek. My GPA's about to go down; my research teacher gave me a C. (it was really stupid) Goodbye 6.67...)
XD That's the greatest Muse parody ever! It made me smileth.
do you want me to send you the very small snippet I have? There are two unconnected parts (how they're connected depends on how the plot will go)
The plot right now is that Gab drops his other manuscripts off at the publishers. He comes back and starts looking for his other love poetry manuscript. He can't find it. He asks Kuro if he's seen it. Kuro has no idea what he's talking about and Gabriel gets a little snappish with him. (You can tell this is waaay in later chapters, because Gabriel changes a lot. He's still inherently the same, but I think now he's more comfortable with showing his feelings. a.k.a, snapping at Kuro)
So, Gabriel's like "NO, it's NOT with the other manuscripts. I sent THOSE off to the publish...the..the publishers..."
and then he realizes what probably happened and starts freaking out.
Dunno if I'll keep this plot or not.
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Date: 2007-03-24 04:00 pm (UTC)I had this whole long prepared rant, too... *mope* Are you valedictorian?! The highest my school can get with perfect grades in all AP classes is a 6.0! (Have I met a valedictorian candidate?!)
Anyway...I was also in the proces of writing a bit to save you time on meters of poetry, particularly the most common four styles: Iambic, trochaic, anapestic, and dactyllic.
These are measure by the number of stressed and unstressed words in a line of poetry, usually divided by number of stresses on words. (or just simply divided into "feet") For the sake of my sanity, I'll have to use symbols for stressed and unstressed words: (U for unstressed, and -- for stressed.)
It's jsut like a rythym of the words. Some people get it, some people don't. I'll try to give examples off the top of my head for poems that use these styles.
Iambic's the most common in english, it's syllable pattern is unstressed followed by stressed (U --) Most sonnets follow the pattern of Iambic pentameter (That is, five feet of iambic per line)
An example (divided up) Would be:
In Xan | a du | did Ku | blah Khan | a state | ly pleas | ure dome | de cree. (Iambic octameter)
Or if you'd prefer, just sing "If you're happy and you know it, clap your hands"--that also works.
Trochaic is just the opposite of iambic--stressed followed by unstressed. (--U) William Blake is the example off the top of my head:
Ty ger | Ty ger | bur ning | bright (implied unstressed) (Trochaic tetrameter)
Anapestic is common too--supposedly Anapestic tatrameter in particular. It follows a pattern of unstressed, unstressed, stressed. (UU--) like:
'Twas the night | be fore Christ | mas and all | through the house (anapestic tetrameter)
Dactyllic is the opposite of Anapestic--stressed, unstressed, unstressed. (--UU)or like:
This is the | for est Prim | e val (implied unstressed) (dactllic trimeter)
Occasionally you get seperate feet which don't follow the pattern:
A Spondee occurs when you have two stressed syllables in a foot,
and a Pyhrric foot occurs when you have no stresses in a foot. (Your CF character should be proud--she's an empty foot!)
However, you can't really write a poem of all spondee or pyhrric feet.
Notably, you have metered poems that don't rhyme. just because you have meter doesn't mean it rhymes--unrhymed iambic pentameter in particular is known as blank verse. (Robert Frost is particularly good at those)
Anyway...consider yourself slightly enlightened. (I'll be Gabriel's meter proofreader too if you'd like. *grin*)
I'd love the snippets. Glad you didn't mind my mild snarking. Poor Gabriel sounds like he's suffering from sever murphey's law. (Poor clueless Kuro too--he probably thinks he's dealing with eraser PMS)
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Date: 2007-07-23 06:42 pm (UTC)