Newly invented pocket size meme
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Okay, this is not really a meme...
Look at the first five journal comments on your main page and see what you get. This is what I had chronologically by most recent:
1) You mean authentic dutch windmill cookies ^___^
2) FFFFF I WANNA HAVE A TEA PARTY! D8 *slobber*
3) Or the Bazooka of Genetic Drift
4) Spatter, eh? I like that.
5) *LMAO*
Use the Chainsaw of natural Selection!
Okay, this is not really a meme...
Look at the first five journal comments on your main page and see what you get. This is what I had chronologically by most recent:
1) You mean authentic dutch windmill cookies ^___^
2) FFFFF I WANNA HAVE A TEA PARTY! D8 *slobber*
3) Or the Bazooka of Genetic Drift
4) Spatter, eh? I like that.
5) *LMAO*
Use the Chainsaw of natural Selection!
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Date: 2008-10-15 03:22 pm (UTC)(we still on for Mizu-kun's amazing amber-coated adventures? You know I was just giving him a real name earlier this week... Along with revamping Dubbiel's role in the series thanks to Nodjmet-san's love of him...)
Have I talked enough?
Date: 2008-10-15 05:48 pm (UTC)We should still be on for adventures and fun and psychic mortal peril. Would you like me to send over the first chapter? I already posted it (damn) so if there's anything you wanted to add to it or change, we could talk a bit about it.
The back story that I had constructed (can change if you'd like!) was a kind of pre-manga thing. Premise is that Itsu and Mizu knew each other before and during the series. The story opens up with Mizu being an "unallied psychic. A free-blooder," someone who isn't on a side in the Aquarian Age. Doesn't mean he's like a free-lance mercenary who will work for any side. (Tracer fic? :P) He just isn't involved, one of the few.
Other free-blooders keep to themselves, try to lay low. It's pretty dangerous to be a free-blooder too. The other side can decide to mind break him against his will. If the other side finds out about it, them could decide to kill him just so he's not used as a weapon against them.
At first it follows Mizu's struggle to keep his normal life while keeping out of the psychic world. Against that, it shows Itsuki, who was already born into the war, kind of hating Mizu for not having to deal with that crap, and he keeps an eye on him for E.G.O (who has files on everybody) because Mizu's a pretty strong psychic who could become a threat. After a while you see Itsu and Mizu meet up more regularly and pretty much hanging out more like friends. It's a relief to Itsuki to steal some of Mizu's life and pretend he's not part of the war for a little while.
Then Mizu gets Mind-broken by Kaoru. (like being mind-raped in a dark alley) And we see his rise and fall in the Aquarian Age! Forced to murder- where is the line between needing and wanting to kill? How can he still be friends with Itsuki when he knows he's on the 'enemy' side? Can he keep attacking people he knows are Itsuki's friends? Where is his conscience? Where is the person he used to be? Stay tuned for next week's shocking new episode of "Dammit, He Probably Knows It Was Me- Angst Angst Angst."
P.S. I have both a happy and depressing ending planned out. Depending on the mood of the fic, it will go either way. The fic's style when I was writing it was gory and had low moments, yeah, but it wasn't really DARK. Not like Dark Priest. (which now might have a horribly depressing ending)
But again, this is all me and can change. I feel like I have a basic premise, but it's kind of hollow. Which is why I came helplessly over to you.
So, tell me what kind of ideas you're thinking about!
I'll probably talk more than you, so, no. Spill over.
Date: 2008-10-16 07:51 pm (UTC)The thing I've been doing lately is the theme of "factional politics" and "strategical balances" of the warring factions' powers. (Maintenance of war-time equilibrium...)
Saying Mizunagi just doesn't want to fight makes him sound lazy, or like he has a choice in the matter. If he has a choice in the matter and didn't "desert" his side or whatever, then wouldn't the war spill over after a while?
Mizunagi--or actually, "Murasaki Sakurai"--in the GW universe is the one who likes his faction, and Kuro is the non-violent idealist who thinks if people just stopped fighting for vengeance and petty things, the war would stop. So...my take on Mizunagi has probably always been a little harder-edged. When he says to Shiba, though, "I fight because it's fun. What other reason do I need?" Either could be a cold, and blatently truthful answer, or it's evasive. (Naturally, Kuro and Mizunagi being related is MY little fanon thing, and it would be silly to assume that in your universe. I used Kuro's awakening as a mindbreaker to pretty much cause chaos for his faction as Gabriel more or less tears it to pieces looking for him. Mizunagi leaves in the midst of that and goes out to look for a master, then. He's basically where he is with Kaoru to avoid Kuro and especially Gabriel. They have a lot of tension left over by the end of the series, which I don't imagine would resolve. I mean...Gabriel kills the Sakurai matriarch and all. Kuro and Gabriel are still being hunted down by freelancers into the Control universe. I mean...Tracer finds them while hanging on with Tomonori... It's not an easy situation to get out of, I'll tell you that.)
My basic advisement so far is that we need to expand the story outside of Stranger and Amber. If you just focus on those two and they're the only ones in the universe, and their petty struggles are the crux of the story, you basically end up writing your own version of my massive-fail Control.
Tension is good. But "Oh Shit. He might know it's me." Gets old after a while. (Not that this sort of thing stopped me when I was a fourteen-year-old writing TXT...) Having the reluctant but dilligent soldier facing the deserter is a little more interesting in my thought. And the piece you'll have to bring in sometime is Haruna. Haruna is fascinating by virtue of her existence. (You can see that she and Naoya are really very close...being "psychic" twins and all. They seem to even have a telepathic thing between them in the canon.) Itsuki's faction might be using him to hunt people with his power, by holding Haruna over him. *shrug* Just a thought.
If you add subplots and nuances, even lame plots become infinitely more cool-looking, I find. *snort* (*cough cough* Gracious Wings *cough cough*)
Plans? Thoughts? Feedback?
Re: I'll probably talk more than you, so, no. Spill over.
Date: 2008-10-16 11:22 pm (UTC)Interestingly enough, my Muse piece has Kuro and Mizunagi as brothers. (if I change Mizu's first name to Murasaki, we could make the name fanon. We could be GODS!...um...demi-gods?)
Well, obviously the "Crap, he knows it's me" is more of the end of chapter soap opera musical parody more than anything. Tension can be tiring.
It's more like...it's more like being born. Before, Mizu doesn't want anything to do with the Aquarian Age and he's like one of those insects trapped in a piece of amber (hence, the title. Title is annoying- not sure what it means. Does it mean Mizunagi is a "stranger caught in amber" or is the Aquarian age "stranger when you are trapped in amber," when you are cut off from it? I've been thinking about it since I thought of the title. I like ambiguous titles.)
The concept of birth. First he's in stasis. Then the war catches up with him. Itsuki has always been part of the Aquarian Age.
Mizu's born into it, and birth is messy, violent, bloody, unbelievably painful.
There. A more thoughtful and less self-depreciating answer. Who would have thought I had it in me?
P.S. Yay, subplots!
Re: I'll probably talk more than you, so, no. Spill over.
Date: 2008-10-16 11:48 pm (UTC)(<3 <3 <3 <3)
You just made my day in so many ways...
Changing his name presumes he needs a psueodymn. (That makes Mentu-rin a demi-god then because she's the one who came up with "Kuro"...)
"Crap he knows it's me" is the best you can do? (Itsuki and Mizunagi demand to remake hairspray in their image...)
And even if Mizunagi's the center of the story and being born "hurts" you still need subplots. (You don't have to self-depreciate! beat me up with your words! I'm machoistic enough to like it! <3)
Subplots
Date: 2008-10-17 04:24 am (UTC)(haven't seen anything yet. Haruna leaves for the University, Itsuki leaves, period. First chapters have everybody all cozy and comfortable so that later on they can burst forth, scatter, and start killing each other and having epiphanies. Somebody obviously has to die in jail. People die in the war. Karin Ashiya gets beaten to death by her abusive husband)
I'm sure I've got nothing on GW.
Aside from subplots for Stranger Amber, wanna talk about ridiculous deaths? ^_^
Re: Subplots
Date: 2008-10-21 07:00 pm (UTC)GW is like a soap opera lately...Don't get me started...I sent you that list ages ago of all the random "shock!" crap which happens there. If anything it's grown lately. (Especially since I've been fleshing out Dubbiel--Nodjmet-san liked him and that got me thinking. Story of my brain... *groan*)
I'd love to talk about rediculous deaths. I have plenty of them.
SCiA and Ridiculous Deaths
Date: 2008-10-22 02:37 am (UTC)I do like that. Tell you what. I will send you chapter one and the fragments/personal notes to myself of another random chapter. (I was going to do one in between that showed Mizu and Itsu in their respective lives first before they met up to bicker again, but you decide!). In the very least, I will be able to finally utilize the LiveJournal Beta documents thing, which I think works a little bit like Gmail Group Documents. A warning that some of the dialogue in the fragment idea chapter is stunted and kind of blunt. This is me knowing the feeling of what I want to say but not really having the inspiration at the moment about how to write it out. *face-keyboard*
Re: SCiA and Ridiculous Deaths
Date: 2008-10-22 03:07 am (UTC)And by all means, send them to me as rough as you please! You think I don't have bits like that? Or bits I've discarded or had to rewrite? Your mess is probably no match for my 3mb of prewritten GW snippets. ^___^
Re: SCiA and Ridiculous Deaths
Date: 2008-10-22 03:29 am (UTC)I am taking a picture of my laptop and posting it so people can help me decide what it's name is. (It seemed like a Rodney, but I'm trying to convince it that Gaullimaufry is a good name)
Kept using Rodney because my laptop was like Stargate Atlantis's Rodney McKay- annoying yet useful. (And, with the addition of some startrek wallpaper, uber geeky)
I put together the first few chapter fragments and am sending them right now)
Re: SCiA and Ridiculous Deaths
Date: 2008-10-22 04:08 am (UTC)Yaay! Chapters! ^_^
Re: SCiA and Ridiculous Deaths
Date: 2008-10-22 04:51 am (UTC)